Fuckin' snow.

[yuuago]

It's snowing out.

I repeat: It's snowing out. It's the 14th of May and it's snowing. :|

I know this is Canada, but this is RIDICULOUS. Fuck you, Mister Weather. Fuck you up the ass with a pine tree - no lube, either, thankyouverymuch.

Anyway.

Had a doctor's appointment this morning. That went well. I have my refill, and all is fine. Unfortunately, I only got maybe, ehhh, three hours of sleep last night, but that will have to do. I'll try my best to go to bed early this evening, I suppose. And maybe I'll take a nap - but I'll be sure to set the alarm so I don't oversleep. That's one of the worst things. I don't feel very well, but again, that's probably the lack of sleep doing it.

Not much more to report at the moment - it's rather early in the day, after all!

I wrote about a page more of the story while in the waiting room. I'm really starting to get into this, even though not much has happened yet. It'll pick up very soon though. Exciting~ I'm still kind of unsure about it though. This is my first time writing Denmark (thankfully he will only have a few scenes), second time writing Norway, and I'm still not quite comfortable with Sweden yet. Well, it's all a matter of practice.

It's bloody difficult, though, to write two people who don't talk much. Good lord. Such a pain in the butt. Good challenge, though. What this tells me: I rely on dialogue as a crutch too much. Need to fix that.

Thought: When Sweden does speak, I don't find his dialogue all that difficult. Seems to me, he's much like my uncle John: speaks quietly, in a low, rumbling voice, using as few words as possible, and you have to pay quite a bit of attention else you won't catch what he's saying. Ahh.

And so, it drives me nuts when people just... write normally and take out the vowels. Guh. So hard to read! And it just doesn't seem quite right. Hmm, I think I've ranted about this before. Anyway.



Norway cupped Sweden's face in his hands, and the other nation bent to his touch, looking upward. He scrutinized what he saw, lips tightened into a thin line. The dark circles under his eyes were still there, but most of the unease had washed away, at least for the time being. Now he merely looked tired. Good.

Much to his surprise, Sweden spoke. "Gonna' stay the night?" he whispered, low voice barely audible even in the stillness.

Norway glanced at the window. It was dark outside, and no doubt as cold as a witch's tit. "I'd be a fool not to," he said.

Comments

[fayore.livejournal.com]

Speaking of Sweden and his vowel-dropping-ness, I don't think it's necessarily a bad thing as long as you know what it sounds like were it spoken, and you make sure it still makes sense/is an actual manner of speech people do. (I do play him, and I do pay careful attention to which sounds are dropped.)

That being said, I'm not really sure why you have an apostrophe after "gonna", since the apostrophe tells me that there's a dropped sound there.

Thaaaat's all I have for feedback; you have a nice, easy to read style. :D

ALSO: LOL SASKATCHEWAN. all we have is wind and sun and rain. /hasn't seen snow in months

[yuuago]

Reason: I overuse apostrophes when writing dialect and have a tendency to add them wherever they aren't necessary. Derp. Should probably pay more attention to that. Thanks for pointing it out, I probably wouldn't have noticed.

And it's true, it isn't necessarily a bad thing - but, well, some people reaallllly overdo it. I'm sure you've seen some such cases.

LOL SASKATCHEWAN indeed. :| This province is crazy. (This is my first year living here. It's been, uh, special.)

[mattyroh.livejournal.com]

I'm envious of your skills. Can't wait 'til you're done, and I have to agree on the Sweden's dialog part. I don't mind if it's only a bit of it, but usually it gets too much.

SNOW, you poor thing, though I am unable to be surprised. Last year it snowed on the 17th of May, our national day, I almost cried when I woke up!

I used to have trouble with not sleeping, but suddenly I would fell asleep almost as soon as I closed my eyes. I wonder why?

[yuuago]

Eee, thank you so much~ It might be a while, depending on how much time I have and how long it turns out to be, but oh well. I'm so excited, yayyyy~

Snow at this time of year is extremely unusual, almost unheard of. I heard so much grumbling and complaining when I went out today! Then again, we like to complain quite vocally about anything and everything.

[mattyroh.livejournal.com]

I can wait, I think.

Well it's the same way here, but like the pessimist I am, I never feel safe until the middle of June. Last year I was proved right.

[yuuago]

*flatly* It's May. We're supposed to be having nice weather! Sunny, bright, tulip-growing weather! When you spend seven months of the year covered in snow, it's nice to finally have some brightness, you know? Bah humbug. :|

Pfff your theory might be correct. 8D Saa, mine - he's so great. Though hanging around with him is kind of awkward, because well, he is a Sweden-type through and through. 'cept not quite as intimidating. So I feel like I need to babble to fill the silence, and I'm really not the babbling sort....

akajsdflkj yes, exactly like that. I wonder what it would sound like. Maybe like talking with a mouth full of cotton balls, maybe. =p And yes, you're right - he doesn't talk that way in the comics. Well, er, the scanlations, anyway. Just short, brief, to the point.

And I shall do my very best to sleep~ Saa, it's been difficult.

[m4n14c.livejournal.com]

B'aww, I miss snow ;__; Global warming stole snow from my part of Sweden pfft.

I imagine Sweden speaking like my dad, lol. And I guess that kinda makes sense since he is a swede x) But my dad talks kinda fast and low and it's hard to hear unless you're used to it 8) it helps a little that people actually are afraid of him even though he's harmless lol MY DAD IS SU-SAN
and you're right about those people who go "s'fjfl 'lkfk'fl fo'oosdks'" when they write Sweden-talk. IT DOES NOT COMPUTE.
_{is it silly of me to try and figure out what accent Sweden would have if he was voiced by a swede?}

[yuuago]

It's 2:30 PM. :| NO. I WILL NOT GO TO BED.

Hmmm~ That impression certainly fits, too. I think I like it.

DOES NOT COMPUTE INDEED. asdlkjfkdf I cannot stand it, m'luv.

Of course it isn't silly! I've certainly spent much time trying to figure out what accent Canada would use, so of course it isn't silly....

[m4n14c.livejournal.com]

... LOL TIME DIFFERENCE. :D

THIS CALLS FOR REVENGE, DARLING. AND IT INVOLVES BERSERK.

_{eeee! ♥ where have you been all my life ;_;}

[yuuago]

Pfffff

BERSERK. WHAT. I do not understand. Oh deeeeeaaaarrrrr D:

! I've been right here, beloved, waiting for you to find me!

[m4n14c.livejournal.com]

IT'S OKAY, I'll handle it. I'm from GODDAMN SWEDEN, I HAVE VIKINGS IN MY BLOOD!! >8D oh god I want a viking!Stitch-icon.

_{Finally together! I hear sweet music in my head - is it you, or is it... has the voices finally gone insane?}

[odie.livejournal.com]

Yuu, I distinctly remember last night when I was rambling on to Pie and Fyre over Skype at 3am, you were the one lecturing me about my poor bed-time habits.

Go to bed, bud. Ignore your freaky May-snow and go have some sweet dreams. ♥

[yuuago]

Hey man, I went to bed at a reasonable hour. It's just that I couldn't sleep.

And it's 3:30PM right now you hoser. :|

... Though actually maybe taking a nap before supper wouldn't be a bad idea.

[nyanni.livejournal.com]

Oh god snow. D8 I feel sorry for you. I was a bit scared when it was raining hail earlier this week, and believe me, they were huge. ;_____; (Well okay not as huge as they would make dents in your car but, still kinda big) And it's been really sunny now but still there are random lumps of snow around. Arggh.

And yeah, got to agree with everyone on that Sweden accent matter, it looks fucking ridiculous with apostrophes and consonants only. D: Would you like to buy a vowel?

[kittencuffs.livejournal.com]

"It's snowing out."

I just did a double-take. It's, like, 90 degrees here. That's like 30 degrees in Canuck temps!

[ryoup.livejournal.com]

It rained here, but I remember there being a snow storm last year in early May. Very "WTF?" inducing. Seriously, Canada, global warming is making your weather so wonky ;_;

And I agree with your voice for Sweden. Not exactly monosyllabic, but still rather curt. h'w c'n p'pl r'd th's n'wys?

[jesusphreaq.livejournal.com]

Snowing = suck suck suck argh. I wanted to bike to school but had to get a ride. ALSO I thought you might be taking summer school with me but I didn't see you in class today! You should join Zichy's T/R class. It looks like tons of fun and you haven't missed much at all. If you read the book and did a few readings you'd be all caught up. Also, book is pretty hilarious.

[hokuton_punch]

Holy shit, your crazy weather. DDD:

Awwwww poor laconic Sverige and Norge. ♥ *admires you*

[spankpig.livejournal.com]

Gack. Snow? Seriously?! That's hardcore, my man. Haaardcore o_o Although it did hail here in TO a few days ago, so we're not too far off. :O

Uwaaaahh, writing dialogue for Sweden I've found to be very hard :/ The interesting thing about all the Scandinavians is that allegedly they're all supposed to have that thick 'grunt-speak' accent except for Finland... which could make my life very difficult. :'D