Speaking of Sweden and his vowel-dropping-ness, I don't think it's necessarily a bad thing as long as you know what it sounds like were it spoken, and you make sure it still makes sense/is an actual manner of speech people do. (I do play him, and I do pay careful attention to which sounds are dropped.)
That being said, I'm not really sure why you have an apostrophe after "gonna", since the apostrophe tells me that there's a dropped sound there.
Thaaaat's all I have for feedback; you have a nice, easy to read style. :D
ALSO: LOL SASKATCHEWAN. all we have is wind and sun and rain. /hasn't seen snow in months
![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
Yuu. Fic writer & book lover. M/Canada.
no subject
Date: 2009-05-14 07:31 pm (UTC)That being said, I'm not really sure why you have an apostrophe after "gonna", since the apostrophe tells me that there's a dropped sound there.
Thaaaat's all I have for feedback; you have a nice, easy to read style. :D
ALSO: LOL SASKATCHEWAN. all we have is wind and sun and rain. /hasn't seen snow in months